One day Me and my class as well as Room 10 went to a beach trip it was called kariotahi. I was really excited because it was hot and it looked like the water was going to be cold yay.
First we got into your bags and lined up to get on the bus on the way there Riley vomited and she vomited all over sally my teacher when we got there we went and put our bags away then they talked to us and then we got a tour around like club then we had morning tea then got in our togs and went down to the beach we played games then we went in the water Riley grabbed onto me then I let her go then the lifeguard got her.
Then the people talked to us about sun smart and rips then the bus came and we went back to school then we all went home....
please leave a helpful comments so I can improve
HI Trinatee, it sounds like you had a lovely day. I would like to suggest that you read your writing out loud, and add some punctuation in. It's a bit hard to read without it.
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Kind Regards
Mrs M
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DeleteYou're welcome! Where is this beach? Is it close to the school?
DeleteHi trinatee i like the way how you put up the picture of all of us on our trip to the beach.
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